Friday, January 12, 2018

If It Doesn't Further the Conflict, Should You Leave It Out?

A writer who attended my retreat/workshop in Tucson recently emailed me with a great question.  It addresses an important choice that writers face every time they work on their books:  what to include and what to omit.
 
She asked:  "What happens when there is an event or narrative that reflects my theme but doesn't have enough conflict to carry the story forward.  Should I exclude it?"  For example, if a character supported the narrator in her journey, but there was no conflict involved, should this character be part of the book?
 
If I can rephrase her question in my own words, based on my own experience and those of many of my clients:  How do you decide what is for you, and what is for the book?   
 
Early drafts and revisions of manuscripts are all about discovering the story.  What do we want to say, how is it best said?  We figure out the flow of scenes or islands, and eventually we build chapters.  It's normal in first drafts to need about 90,000 words (or more) because we know we'll be editing that down as we revise.  First drafts of manuscripts are often bloated with stuff we end up discarding.  Maybe it appealed to us early on but as we get clearer about the book, we learn what's not needed.
 
In the beginning, though, we don't know this.  We are gathering people, events, and experiences to make our scenes, islands, chapters.  I find it's counterproductive in those early drafts (say, the first five or so) to eliminate a lot of material because you think it's not relevant.  That's dangerous because your view of the story is still limited.  In my experience, it's only after several drafts that a writer really gets the sense of the story.  I've learned the hard way not to discard, or edit down, too early.  If you try to make the manuscript too perfect in early drafts, you won't surprise yourself.  And if you aren't surprised, the reader will never be.   
 
Once you have drafted enough, revised a couple of times, and have a reasonable manuscript that flows pretty well, you can begin to look at each scene for whether it furthers the story.  This is bloat-trimming, and it has to be done.  (But again, not too early, or you'll end up with very little unexpected beauty.)  Some writing teachers use this formula to help trim bloat:  if it doesn't further the conflict, jettison it.  I use this formula in my own writing, and it works well for a while.   
 
So we've talked about two stages of drafting:  the early draft, which includes more than you need, and the bloat-trimming stage which begins to examine the purpose of each scene or section.  No longer are you keeping a scene because it means a lot to you.  It has to mean something to the reader too.  
 
In this second stage, you look at each of your choices.  You use the formula that the guys who created South Park suggest:  rather than this, then that, try looking at each scene for its effect on other scenes.  This because of that.  It makes a world of difference.  If a scene doesn't cause an effect, in some way, it's not useful to the story.  Stories are built on cause and effect. 
 
I've learned this the hard way in my own writing.  I enjoy the gathering stage, which is like making a huge Saturday-morning soup from all the leftovers in the fridge.  I can make a pretty delicious soup.  But I might make a better soup without quite as many ingredients.  It's hard to remove items from a soup pot but a manuscript is malleable.  You can go through and pull things out if you have enough (1) overview and (2) detachment from your own words.    
 
But I've also learned there's a third stage, and this answers my student's question.   
 
Once I've triaged based on conflict potential, I have to look deeper.  Beyond asking, Does this person or event further the conflict? I must also ask, Does this person or event help the reader understand the why behind the actions, decisions, motivations of the narrator?   
 
Increasingly, in my own writing, this why is most important to making the writing compelling, allowing the characters to stick with a reader, allowing the plot to be believable.   
 
You will do what you want, in terms of how you draft and revise.  But just consider these three stages.  They might help you avoid some heartache as you build your book.  Give yourself time and space to make a big soup that has everything in it--that's a legitimate stage one.  Don't refine too soon, before you've got enough material in place.  You'll end up not being surprised.  Then, when you're ready to move to stage two, consider the effect of each scene--not just its conflict-furthering potential, but also whether it causes something to happen that's not about conflict.  And finally, enjoy stage three, which is the most fun.  Below is a writing exercise to tap into the excitement of stage three, if you're interested.   
 
Your Weekly Writing Exercise    
I ask most of my private clients to do this exercise because it's a great way to start looking at the why of each person in your story.  Including yourself, if you are the narrator.
 
It's pretty simple:  write a bio of each important person in your story.  A resume, a history.  Made up or real (depending on genre).   
 
Then go through an underline the turning points, those moments in a person's life that shape their beliefs or misunderstandings about themselves and the world.  These are the components of why.  They may not always include conflict.  They might be a moment of witnessing something, overhearing something, losing something, remembering something.   
 
Writing the bio will bring them to your awareness, allow you to select what to include.  

Friday, January 5, 2018

Three Ways to Help Your New Year's Writing Resolutions Actually Happen

I'm not a huge fan of New Year's resolutions, especially when it comes to my writing goals.  But I do appreciate making time for a pause to review what I've accomplished in the past year and imagine what I'd like to bring into the new one.  It's more of a visioning moment than setting firm goals, because I know (oh so well!) how my goals can morph as the year goes forward.  And I only know what I can see from this moment.  But I've used three methods to help myself create realistic goals for my new writing year, based on what I learned from the previous twelve months.   
 
Here' s a short writing exercise to try this week, if you want to reflect and plan intelligently, in a way that acknowledges your particular creativity.
 
1.  Thinking back on 2017, write down three highlights in your writing life.  These could be new ideas you explored, insights about your writing, a new skill, an exceptional community experience (like a great class or writing group).  Describe them in a few sentences.
 
For me, they would be:
* I received excellent feedback from my writing coach and mentor.
* I finally understand the deeper motivation of one of my trickier characters.
* Through a writing friend, I found a next step for 2018 that looks promising.    
 
These highlights should make you feel great, as you review them.  They can be large or small, specific or general.   
 
2.  What big obstacle or challenge happened in your 2017 writing life that turned out to bring you an unexpected new direction or insight?   
 
For me, this would be:
* A friend referred me to a coach (someone whose books I love) and I signed up for a phone consult.  Although I got great information, the coach's teaching style was very hard on my spirits.  The call left me depressed for a week.  I remember feeling this same way when I signed up for riding lessons with a teacher I now think of as the "horse Nazi."  The call taught me that just because a teacher has great information, their teaching style might not be what I need.  It also led to an unexpected new direction:  another publisher writer, who also knew this coach, told me about a different teacher whose information is just as good but teaches in an affirming style that fits for me, keeping my spirits up.  So far, the new exchange has benefited me enormously.  I wouldn't have gotten there without the bad experience.
 
3.  Looking ahead, write three things you know you need next.  Rather than focusing on achievements or successes, which are the outer elements of a writing life, look for specific qualities that could improve your writing life this year.  For example, a certain area that needs skill-building, a system for getting regular feedback, someone who can support you through your next learning curve (coach, class, teacher), an opportunity for and courage to take a new risk (especially helpful if you're bored with what you're creating right now).

For me, this would be:
*  Going back to my favorite rhythm of writing first for an hour each day, before I start my work day.
*  Taking the risk to sketch out the synopsis for my next novel and get feedback on it.
*  Joining an online class. 

Happy new year!  All good wishes for your writing life in 2018.

Friday, December 15, 2017

Becoming a Marketing Machine--What It Takes to Promote Your Book

It's hard for writers to hear this:  writing your book isn't your only job in becoming an author.    

Once you've completed your manuscript, put it through revision, secured an agent or not, and sold it to a publisher, maybe you think you can relax back and let everyone else handle the nasty details of getting it into readers' hands.  When I began publishing in the eighties, that was the case.  But it's not true anymore.  Now writers need to learn all about marketing and promotion.  It's part of being an author.

Friday, December 8, 2017

Writing about Sex, Intimacy, and Other Dangers

Sex is hard to write.  I've written two sex scenes in my life so I'm no expert, but I found each extraordinarily difficult.  

The main challenge was not any reservations about including sex scenes in my fiction but how to make them reveal more about character than the character's actions.  That's my personal preference as a reader, as well as a writer, and it may not be yours.  You may be a Fifty Shades of Gray kind of writer and reader, and more power to you.  But I wanted to address the topic, especially after a coaching client sent me this email.

Friday, December 1, 2017

Feedback Says My Writing Is "Dense"--What Does This Mean and What Can I Do About It?

A student in my online classes is writing a futuristic thriller about memory loss.  I've enjoyed reading her chapters in class and so have her classmates.  But recently she emailed me about some feedback she'd received that she didn't understand.  She said she couldn't find much information about online, so she was hoping I could help her with what to do with the comments.
Readers have told her that her writing can be dense and hard to get into.  As a thriller writer--and someone who is very comfortable with action scenes--this confused her.  "For my book to be accessible I want to make it as quick and easy to read as possible," she told me.   "I've tried to make it fast paced because that grabs people's attention."

Friday, November 17, 2017

How to Get Enough Distance from Your Story to Actually Write It

In January 2001, physician and writer, Therese Zink, lived through a traumatic experience:  While on an international aid mission in Chechnya, her boss was kidnapped.  "That experience got me writing," Therese says.  "I'd kept a journal since a creative-writing class in high school twenty-some years earlier and dabbled at times with more creative efforts. But after the kidnapping, I had to write." 


Little did she know how long it would take her to learn to write and to tell that story.

Friday, November 10, 2017

The Magic of Showing Up--How to Design and Commit to a Writing Practice

What's the difference between a writer who gets a book finished and a writer who never does?  A writing practice.  Believe it--there's nothing more important.  Not talent, not a great idea.  It's down to basics:  putting self in chair, putting hands on keyboard or taking up the pen, and staying there past all the internal whining and doubt and misery to actually put words on the page.


But we all whine.  We all get up and sharpen every pencil in the house sometimes, instead of writing.   

Friday, November 3, 2017

Pros and Cons of Using Past or Present Tense


A blog reader sent me a great question this week:  "My writing group discussed present versus past tense when writing memoir.  A group member's editor had her switch her present tense chapters to past tense.  She had some of each.  Are there virtues of each or should memoir always be past tense?"
I get this question a lot in classes, so it's always good to know the pros and cons of using past or present tense. 

Friday, October 27, 2017

Which Point of View Should I Use? A Tour of First, Second, Third, and More

I often get this question in my classes:  what point of view is best for my book?  Who is best to tell this story?  What are the differences between first, second, third, and omniscient points of view?
There's an underlying confusion about "voice" and point of view in story, which I want to address first.   

Friday, October 20, 2017

How to Build a Chapter--A Cool New Template to Try for Any Genre


This week I'm teaching on Madeline Island, a beautiful spot on Lake Superior off the shore of northern Wisconsin.  Yesterday my class of ten writers explored a new template I've been working with for building chapters.  As a review for them and a gift for you, I thought I'd share it.
Many of my book-writing students, as well as private clients, even those already published, struggle with how to build strong chapters.  Over the past year, I've been studying different templates for chapter building.  Asking myself some hard questions: